Sunday, April 29, 2012

2 excercises from practice of poetry

Short narrative(164)


In the warm morning air I felt a chill.
The shock of what happened fresh in my mind,
We ran to my car thoughts racing, confusion.
What was wrong, were we really that blind.
A night full of dancing, indulging and fun.
Camping and singing once it was done.
He left in an anger, we brushed it off
The call in the morning destroyed us.
I still remember hearing those tears
Of my other best friend fall in the grass.
Sick for not seeing the hurt that he masked. 


Writing the spectrum(55)

Green
The color of woods, OU and clovers
Things I hold dear to my heart.
Memories forever in my mind can be seen
Whenever I see the color green.
Through all the seasons, something
Is there for me to fall back on,
A blissful dream,
Whenever I see the color green.




Friday, April 27, 2012

Critical assignment

errance Hayes seems to have many themes running through his book Lighthead. One of the themes that I noticed was parenting. He mentions his stepfather many times. Two poems where I noticed this the most were “Three Measures of Time” and “Lightheads Guide to Parenting”. “Three Measures of Time” is a poem that takes you through an instance in the day through perspectives of his brother, father and mother. “Lighthead’s Guide to Parenting” seems to outline ideas that he had about parenting based on experiences in his childhood. In both poems, some clues gave me the idea that his father was not very involved in his life. “By the time the coals die down/ you’re asleep before the whispering TV. / No such thing as darkening”. This line from “Three Measures of Time” suggests that his father did not interact much with the children. Also, in “Lighthead’s Guide to Parenting” a similar quote, “a father to slump black and whipped on a big couch. Come darlings, unstring my boots”, gives you the same separated feeling. Although it seems that he may be tired from a hard days work supporting the family, the fact that it is mentioned twice makes it seem like it is a big deal to the speaker in the poem. Another theme about parenting that I noticed was that he seemed to be closer to his mother. In the poem “Three Measures of Time”, Hayes attitude towards his mother seems thankful and understanding. He claims that his mother tells time by “You are in a kitchen with a spatula/ above something inedible or inevitable/ darkening or you are asleep/ in a locked room”. To me it seems like the mother is providing food and life for the family. Hayes would be closer hi mother since she is biological. It seems he knows how hard she works so that they can have food, but she is still not prominent in his life. In “Lighthead’s Guide to parenting” it suggests that his parents were not very good parents. For someone to write a poem like this is seems that they must have some conflicting thoughts how he was raised and how he should have been raised. “Therefore I suggest corporal punishment as a way to establish the boundaries between youth and adulthood… If you are disciplined with your discipline, he or she will love you”. This quote seems to say that his childhood lacked discipline. He seems to wish that that there was more structure in his raising because he writes multiple times about the distance between himself and his parents.

Thursday, April 19, 2012

Poem inspired by Pure Country

The lights and smoke,

The laser shows,

The loud bass bumping,

My true friend knows,

How much this is not me.

Crowded cities,

Sold out shows,

Fans ecstatic,

My true friend knows

How much this is not me.

Wide open spaces

Where the wild breeze blows

Living free,

My true friend knows

How much that this is me.

Smokey bar rooms

Small town shows

Work boots dancing

My true friend knows

How much that this is me.

Why must we do things

That we don’t want

Be like a puppet

Put up a front

To please everyone around you.

Be free and wild

Like a feral horse

Run with the wind

And then of course

I know that this is me.

Critical thinking

In W.H. Auden’s essay titled “Poetry as Memorable Speech”, he talks about how even though there are many types of poetic language used in poetry, even the simpler language can be memorable. Any type of language that makes us think or inspires certain emotions can be considered memorable. Different poems will do this to different people. Certain lines or themes may invite us to remember things that happened in our past or resonate with us based on our personal beliefs.

In Philip Larkin’s poem, Reasons for Attendance, he describes a scene where he is standing outside of a bar or dance club watching the people inside. This poem has many pieces of memorable speech to me.

“ The wonderful feel of girls. Why be out there?

But then why be in there? Sex, yes, but what

Is sex? Surely to think the lions share

Of happiness is found by couples – Sheer

Inaccuracy, as far as I am concerned.”

This particular section reminds me of weekends spent drinking uptown in Athens. When I hear this section I immediately go to memories of walking down Court Street and looking into the bars and seeing the commotion of all the other college aged kids. There always is a feeling that many of the people are looking for sexual experiences, couples or not, when you look into the bar windows. There is always someone on somebody’s lap or dancing on someone. Larkin’s tone is similar to mine. He wonders why they do this because he does not feel like that it the place for him. He gives off the impression that he would rather be somewhere more quiet enjoying himself. “But not for me, nor I for them; and so/ With happiness. Therefore I stay outside”. The voice sticks with me because it sounds like something that would be going through my head while being in the same situation.

Auden says, “The test of a poet is the frequency and diversity of the occasions on which we remember his poetry”. While I may not think of this poem every time I am up town, probably due to the state in which I am in during those occasions, It is the type of poem that if I were up there sober I would remember. The poem does not specifically say that he is sober at the time but the experience of being outside looking in reminds of being the only sober one at a party. You are able to look around and really wonder ‘why do I ever do this’. Memorable speech does not have to be about anything major such as a death or beauty as long as it makes you think. Larkin seems to have a indifferent tone until the very end where he says “Or I lied”. This make you wonder if he was saying this and then coming to the realization that he does in fact want to be in the bar sharing in the chaos. He seems a little unsure if maybe under different circumstances someone else migh be standing outside looking in ad seeing him in there.

Friday, April 6, 2012

when i was one and twenty

Happy

When I was one and twenty

To Ol’ Friends I will go

To drink some beer and shoot some pool

And hang out with my bros

I don’t know where the night will take us

I just know I will not drive

Maybe to the honkeytonk

To show them how I jive.

It feels so good

To be this age for so long I have waited

Just hanging out and having fun

The thought makes me elated.


Bummer

When I was one and twenty

I have to leave my friends

To go to school and read some books

Not glad of how this ends.

I don’t like leaving home

For the school I chose to pick

My friends are here my rots are deep

The thought can make me sick.

Off to school I go now

Summer memories bright in my head

No home cooked meals endless nights

And of course my comfy bed.


Mixed feelings

When I was one and twenty

School work still in my mind

To drink or study that’s the question

What mischief can I find?

My friends at school are great

Not as much as those from home

We still have fun and happy times

When Athens we do roam.

I will surely miss the farmer’s fields

And stacking hay up in the barns

But Athens is a wondrous place

With many subtle charms.


blog # 2

The two poems, “Easter, 1916” by Yeats and “Returning We Hear Larks” by Rosenberg, both portray a different view of war. In Yeats’ poem, it seems that he is talking more about the beauty of war while Rosenberg paints a portrait of misery that is only lightened by the sounds of the larks. At any minute that noise could be bombs or some other terror but the sounds of the birds help to calm the soldiers. Rosenberg likes to use similes in his poem to help you to paint the portrait as well as Yeats, who does it to compare the feelings that he has towards war to things that are more beautiful. “that is Heaven’s part, our part to murmur name upon name, as a mother names her child when sleep at last has come on limbs that have run wild (Yeats)”.

These poems compare to us because there are many hardships that people face everyday and there is always that one thing that gives us hope even when we think that there is none. Not specifically towards war, but Rosenberg’s example of the larks effect on the soldiers, shows an example of this that can be seen in many different aspects of life.



Contemporary poem

A taste of Afghanistan

Rob Densmore first went to Afghanistan in 2004 with the US navy. he returned in 2007 as a freelance journalist particularly concerned about the effects of the turmoil on people. He then did a Masters degree in London in War and Psychiatry returning in 2008 to conduct research on mental health in private security contractors.

His stories, interviews, and poems deal mostly with the content and historical perspective of these trips - but "with the human element in mind".

A taste of Afghanistan

City sand has its own taste

Not the country’s dust,

But darker.

It’s stronger – bitter parts

Under infantry foot.

Under 500 years going and coming.

Kipling’s finest up and over –

Through the pass,

Through the places where soldiers stood

In stolid white snow.

Cemeteries in the pass where Alexander’s own

Fell on the square rocks.

Paved with smoothed over river rock,

This open grave – white, bare.

Kabul sand polishes everyone’s edges.

Tajiks sharp on the cusp

And Northern Alliance coming down

Hard in the fray.

They all want each other’s throats.

Their wives lost in the fight –

Save for pointed heels and

Gold bangled over fine red henna.

Eastern sand and southern sand,

Pakistan sand crooked as broken teeth,

Herati sand pure and rising to the top.

Nothing mixes and there is no space in between.

If God loved this place he doesn’t now.

If He breathed in the brass bullet casings

And the diesel air and spiteful prayers.

A place for lust and dirty children

And the things night can hide.

What things grown men can hide-

In the dark corners of their own children’s rooms.

In the big shadows of a capital with no master and no disciple.

No scope for all things to come together

The sand and the dust and the dirt that makes things grow-

When it is left alone.

But we’ve put our fingers in it

And the stirring and stamping won’t leave

Much for the growing.

Dust bowls and cyclone air will take the rest.

Every village is filled with it now –

Dust from our bombs and inside our APCs.

Dirt scrubbed from our rifle actions

And ground into our sweaty palms like Mississippi silt.

And still nothing grows.

I’ve taken a knee in seventeen villages –

On street corners and broken down roundabouts,

On highways and in shattered homes.

On helo pads and plywood chapel steps,

On the backs of dead men-

And screaming vile women.

They will, all of them, bend or break –

It is either them or me.

It’s either winning or losing

And putting in its place

What does not belong,

Sand of a different taste and hue

That cannot tell me it is sorry.

Rob Densmore, 2009